The Classification of Online Shopping
This is a technology times, computer is a very important tool in our life, most people has the experience of online shopping. Population who engages in online shopping may be divided into age groups, such as ages of 15 to 25, ages of 25 to 35 and above 35. Different age groups will purchase different types of productions. Who are ages of 25 to 35 group are office workers. They could afford to pay higher price on products. These price of products may be sub-divided into three groups. These include under $2000, $2000 to $5000 and above $5000. Each price group has its own goods. The price under $1000 may be further sub-divided into accessories, such as earrings and clothing. The price during $2000 to $5000 may be further sub-divided into 3C products, such as cellphone and MP3. The price above $5000 may be further sub-divided into household appliances, for example digital cameras and notebook computers. In addition to what mentioned above, online shopping could classify into severl detail parts.
posted by eva @ 7:57 AM
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At 1:55 AM,
Yuhsiuwriting said…
Good classification and use of sentence structure!
This is a technology times, computer is a very important tool in our life, most people has the experience of online shopping.
-->This is an era of rapid technology advancement. Computer...; most people have...
(妳知道為什麼這裡要用分號 ; 嗎?)
Online shopping may be divided into age groups, such as ages of 15 to 25 and ages of 25 to 35.
-->Population who engages in online shopping may be divided according the age range into people who are 15-25, 25-35, (and above 35.)
Customers who are ages of 25 to 35 group are office workers.
-->who are of the age of 25 to 35 are...
They could afford to pay higher price on products.
-->How about other groups' ability to pay? Since you already mentioned one group, why don't you also talk about other groups?
-->You can divide the essay into three (or four) paragraphs.
1. Introduction
2. Age
3. Price
4. Conclusion
These price of products may be sub-divided into three groups. These include under $2000, $2000 to $5000 and above $5000. Each price group has its own goods. The price under $1000 may be further sub-divided into accessories, such as earrings and clothing. The price during $2000 to $5000 may be further sub-divided into 3C products, such as cellphone and MP3. The price above $5000 may be further sub-divided into household appliances, for example digital cameras and notebook computers.
-->good!
In addition to all of above, online shopping could classify into severl detail parts.
-->In addition to what mentioned above, online shopping ...
-->This part can be developed into a conclusion paragraph!
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